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The giant, the eagle, the monkey, and me,
Each holds a lock; I hold the key,
They rage and they scream and plead to go free,
The giant, the eagle, the monkey, and me.

The giant is trapped, imprisoned, enslaved.
It toils to make up what its forefathers gave.
An eternity passes and it still works the soil,
Its muscles built up with sweat, blood, and oil.
It longs fo the light, but to the dark it is chained.
How long can a giant live with such pain?

Far past the clouds, in its perch Eagle lies.
Dreaming of days when birds could still fly.
Its claws are now dull, its feathers graying,
It dreams of long-ago battles, the shrieks and the slaying.
But its glory is dead, its wings clipped and worn,
Its dreams gone in smoke, its heart broken and torn.
How can one comfort a soul so forlorn?

And the monkey? It cries, in the dead of the night.
It wrings wooden hands as it laments its plight.
The bars of its cage are not metal, silver, or steel,
But made of fear, sorrow, hate, and the guilt we all feel.
It rattles its bars, it shrieks and it shouts,
But no one will look, much less let it out.
Who has the courage to quiet its shouts?

The giant, enslaved;the eagle twisted and dying;
The monkey trapped behind bars, its whole life spent crying,
How can we possibly save them? says I, sighing.

Each with its own lock, each in a cage,
And each with its own hopes and fears to assuage,
They beg me for mercy, for freedom, for peace,
And their plea is granted, I give them release.
The giant must learn to control others' rage.The bird must look forward, away form its age.
And the monkey? It must learn to fight,
Escape from its cage and run into the light.
Because I'd like to know...
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not only that i was amazed of how will composed it is, i also had great time thinking about the looks of the creatures you used and wanted to follow their stories to know what happens!! which is very cool ^o^
i gotta say these were one of the best 3 minutes i ever spent in my life :la:

i think you'll be a super awesome writer someday, so keep 'em coming :woohoo:
you have a very good talent in choosing the words, and also story telling that as i said before made me want to know what's gonna happen to the creatures next ??
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Orima-Kazooie Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Dude just yes. Awesome. This. This I don't have words.
One little thing I noticed though is on monkey's stanza you used the word 'shouts' to end two different lines.
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hiddenpowerice Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you! and yeah ^^'~
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Waffle217 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazing
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RedPanda7 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
Oh my god. The poetry in this was just beutiful. Literally just beutiful. I hope you write more poems soon!
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hiddenpowerice Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
did you mispell 'beautiful' on purpose? Anyway, thanks :D
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RedPanda7 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
Maybe...Wait, spelt it wrongly? I read all the time!
No problem
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NahaniDawg Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the symbolism of this! Amazing!
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hiddenpowerice Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
tahnk you! :9
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